Comment on Jessica's blog:
Pros: I thought your blog was interesting. I like that example your mom used "hit home". The fact that you asked them about what they want for themselves when they die was great. That was definitely something that i could have done to make my blog stronger.
Neutral: The Cherry on top could have been your perspective on how you want your body to be dealt with when you die.
Cons: Revise what you write before posting to make sure you don't have small grammatical errors.
Overall good job!
Neutral: The Cherry on top could have been your perspective on how you want your body to be dealt with when you die.
Cons: Revise what you write before posting to make sure you don't have small grammatical errors.
Overall good job!
Comment on Brendan's blog:
I noticed that religion was one of your main points. I enjoyed to know that you could back it up with examples of people who follow your religion and people who don't. Religion was a topic that took a big role in my post as well. I think that you are right, the reason why we do funerals is because of our religion. As a catholic i shared our family views on care of the dead. I have to say though, that i myself am not a very religious person. Thankfully i haven't had many members pass away. Nor have i been to any funerals.
Stupendous blog, i enjoyed it!
Stupendous blog, i enjoyed it!
Comment on Ruben's blog:
Moving on? I am not entirely sure what that feels like since i have never really experienced a death and have never been in a funeral. What i enjoyed most was that connection towards family tragedies. I know that is certainly true because i have seen it a lot in movies. Also, when my great grandmother died my grandmother would beat herself up over it. It was painful to see her suffer like that. Although i think that one should keep in mind that being born leads to death but its what you do in between to make it worth living.
To improve you should make it more descriptive. Maybe add more of the interview and some personal experiences. And small grammatical errors as well.
To improve you should make it more descriptive. Maybe add more of the interview and some personal experiences. And small grammatical errors as well.
Comment on Bryanna's blog:
Bryanna, i like how you always post yuou questions and answers from your interview. I have to say i stole your idea for my blog. Its seems like both your sister and mother have never really thought about how their funeral. Thank you for posting on my blog.
Allwyn said he didn't do a post so i didn't comment.
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Comment Received From Bryanna:
I love how you talked about the way that you thought about it , how everyone around you thinks about and how philosophy looks at it. I feel that you had a lot of important things to say and point out. Like how "Luckily up to date i haven't had a close family member pass away"
you could still imagine how other people would feel and feel with death.
Comment Received From Jessica:
i think that it was personally very smart to ask someone who is pretty old. (no offense). but i think they are one of the best people to ask for adivce and wisdom about a lot of topics. because i personally feel like they have a lot of personal experience with stuff and have a lot of knowledge. things have changed over the years so i think that they have seen those changes and could understand it better than us. so by going to your grandma, i think she had a lot of personal insights about the care of the dead. nice job.
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Comment From Mentor:
Comment From My Mentor:
Ariel's Mentor
The interview pertaining to death featuring the writer's grandmother brought upon varies emotions and cultural traditions. The step by step process involving the aftermath of death demonstrated to be a highlight within the interview. The justification presented by the grandmother concerning her mother's death appeared dubious without further interrogation. That being said, the quote pertaining to the equality of death without giving privilege to any particular race or financial stability of an individual demonstrated the comprehension of such a delicate topic by the interviewee. Furthermore, the organization of the interview was concise and lucid bringing about credit to the writer.
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