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-My mentor said: 
I liked the last few lines of Christian's story, about how he became more responsible, finished college and is now in Med School. Those are not easy things to do at any age and especially at a young age when there are plenty of temptations to take the easy way out. Life isn't easy without children and it doesn't get any easier with them. Focus and discipline are absolutely necessary if you are going to be successful in life. I am happy to see Christian has those qualities because without them he would not succeed and his child would have an even higher mountain to climb than he does now.

My main constructive comment is on the writing. It is not clear in some places such as how "she was affected in a couple of ways. Through her diet, daily movements, emotions (they were unbalanced, she was moody), and no social life". Also, I believe grammar is important. Small letter I when referring to yourself and no apostrophe in I'm is something I would expect in a casual email but not in school work.

Overall it was interesting and I liked the way you set up the age difference. That was a surprise and kept my interest as a reader.




-Comments i posted on group mate's blogs:


---> On Jessica Cornils blog i posted:


 Your blog was inspirational. I even found a theme, "never give up,its worthwhile in the end." I really like how even though things were complicated there was a solution in the end and a great experience. when you said, " she forgot about all of that pain she went through just to physically see him for the first time. she was very thrilled." That line stood out to me because i realized how much a mother loves their child and is willing to take the pain just to make sure the child is fine or to see it. Something constructive you could probably work on is being more descriptive about the complications or process of birth because then the stories will be like, BAM! Since they were intriguing.


---> On Allwyn's blog i posted:


After reading your blog i noticed you used religion. Religion is not a big factor in my life i do believe in god but i'm not a church person. Are you very religious? Because reading your blog gave me that impression. I'm glad things are working out for your aunt. Even though i dont know your mom i can tell your mom is a strong woman, reading what she said was very deep and sweet.
Something constructive can be to expand on conversations next time maybe some quotes like you did in the conversation with your mom. The last 2 stories seemed like bubbles.


---> On Ruben's blog i posted:


Good job. Those are common things women do. I like how you talked about a male's role during a woman's pregnancy. And yes you don't need to be a mother to comprehend what that's like but you won't fully understand until you are pregnant. You could work on being creative. Your blog is very vague and not very descriptive. Work on that bubble strategy i'm sure it will help.




- Comments posted on my blog by group mate's:


----> What Allwyn posted on my blog:


I really liked the blog, especially the first interview, i was actually quite interested in that one due to the fact that you showed me a different way of viewing birth, instead of stating the normal, it was beautiful and remarkable. You grabbed my attention by explaining the hardships, you showed the reality, not the fantasy. You gave insight on how difficult birth can be when its unexpected. You explained very well how it changed each persons life (the good and the bad.) It was interesting to see how at the end the father turned into a 360 and took responsibility. How one baby, a single human being can alter a situation even if it takes time, how an unexpected unwanted child can can change a persons world for better or worse.
The second interview was also thoughtful, but not as insightful as the first, but i like how it contrasted the first interview, this one started off with the women having a good life, and than when she became pregnant, her life wasnt as great for some period of time, but the cons that you talked about were very realistic, you told us different ways she was affected.
Some feedback would be just to maybe explain some of the cons a little more, mainly for the second interview, and maybe ask future questions like if she would go through the experience again or something in that idea, but overall, it was a whole different perspective that was shown and given to me, but it was a realistic view and it was insightful.


----> What Jessica posted on my blog:


i think that those were both two different stories that just about a lot of people go through. for some, they dont feel like they are ready and when they are scared they try to take the easy way out and get rid of it. but at the same time, you have to ask yourself why should i get rid of a life. nobody should be a mistake if it was ment to be then it was ment to be. birth isnt an easy thing to get rid of like anything else. and then on the other hand, a lot of people go through what your second peson went through.
at times you loose your social life because now you cant go out whenever you please or have just anybody over. at least for the first couple months. what i learned based off these two stories is that a baby is a life changer and it shifts your life in a direction you wouldnt imagine until it happens to you. even though you are ready or not ready, you still dont know whats ahead and whats going to happen. birth is a powerful level in life that no matter who you are, your gonna experience it one way or another.