I thought that your post was pretty interesting. Your method was smart because you basically made a survey and asked 5 family members to answer some questions about their birth preference. I agree a lot of women do chose doctors more because they don't have much knowledge. we should create an information blog, and add all of our experiences/research.
What i like about your project is that you posted your survey and each persons answers in a way that we could comprehend it easily.
This project mattered to me because i want a midwife and because my exhibition paper will be on midwife's and doctors. Your project gave me the idea of making a survey, that could be good for my paper too besides increasing the amount of knowledge i have on birth.
Maybe something you could improve on is your elevator speech, great posture though!
=] great job i enjoyed it!
For Devin (classmate):
Your project was very informational. The umbilical cord isn't a topic that really comes up during birth discussions. Through your project now we know more information that we can share with a woman who will be giving birth in a hospital. You mentioned the seven huge benefits to delaying the cutting of the umbilical cord and that one risk.
I liked the way you posted your paper because it was very easy to follow. It was like an informational outline.
Your project mattered to me not only because i found it intriguing but also because i have more knowledge over what's good for the child. I never knew this nor did i think it was important and now i see it is.
Great job i really liked your post and elevator speech.
Let me start by saying that choosing abortion as your topic was a good idea. Originally my project was going to be about adoption. I also agree with rigel because this is another side of birth we don't really look at. We spent most of our classes talking about hospital births and midwives. I like that you provided statistics to support you argument. My mom once had an abortion so i can relate to the feeling. I remember i was 12 and she didn't want to but my dad convinced her to. I think abortion isn't always the best alternative. I personally feel like if i made the mistake i won't learn from it unless i take responsibility from it.
your project mattered to me because abortion is another aspect of birth.(oxymoron)
Over all i think that it was a great post but you could probably structure it better and narrow it down to make it stronger.
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Comment from Stephanie:
Hospital births are horrible and not what your ideal birth is going to be.
After reading your project I valued how personal you got. It made the story interesting and you were very engaging and comical. Just like you I do not plan on having a hospital birth because the nurses and doctors seem too busy and pissed off (based off of what I've researched and learned.) Your story good have been stronger if you spoke deeper about how the nurses treated your mother and what happened once the doctor got to the your mother. I enjoyed your project great job.
Comment from Eloise:
Ariel, you shared you and your families intimate story about the birth of your premature sister and the hardships that came with her birth. you then reflected based on what you have learned summarizing that you would not like to have a baby in a hospital but in a birthing center. I completley agree girl !
What I valued about your post was how you were able to learn from your mothers decisions and hopefully imrpove the outcome for yourself. I also really valued that you wrote a narrative I think it changes from an essay and shows the true emotional side of birth, you make that clear expecially with the discription of your mothers hospital stay.
Your project matters to me because I think it is proof of another women empowering herself, it also shows a deep love between you and your family which i think is very important.
I really enjoyed your narritive, I would just suggest proof reading it before posting !
Great job !
What I valued about your post was how you were able to learn from your mothers decisions and hopefully imrpove the outcome for yourself. I also really valued that you wrote a narrative I think it changes from an essay and shows the true emotional side of birth, you make that clear expecially with the discription of your mothers hospital stay.
Your project matters to me because I think it is proof of another women empowering herself, it also shows a deep love between you and your family which i think is very important.
I really enjoyed your narritive, I would just suggest proof reading it before posting !
Great job !
Comment from Natalie:
Your piece revolved around the birth of your sister and your experience watching your mother receive less than adequate care. You then connected this to your own future and how you might have gone about the situation.
I valued how personal you were able to get with this post. It was nice to hear a first hand account of what went on, from someone other than the mother's perspective.
I think this is significant because it really illustrates how a hospital works with the convenience of the doctor in mind. The fact that the nurse would even attempt to push the baby back into the mother is horrifying.
Next time I might put even a little more of your own analysis, but otherwise I really enjoyed it.
I valued how personal you were able to get with this post. It was nice to hear a first hand account of what went on, from someone other than the mother's perspective.
I think this is significant because it really illustrates how a hospital works with the convenience of the doctor in mind. The fact that the nurse would even attempt to push the baby back into the mother is horrifying.
Next time I might put even a little more of your own analysis, but otherwise I really enjoyed it.
Comment from Johnny:
I can't believe your mother I had to go through all of that. I 100% agree with you when you say, Doctors don't really care about there patients and do what is most convenient for them.
What i valued about this post was how you gained insight from both your mothers past birth experiences as well as the movie to come to a conclusion of how you want to have a birth when the time comes.
The only thing i would do is, i would add more try to connect this experience to other peoples experiences taht you looked up. But Besides that this is really good paper and i enjoyed reading this.
What i valued about this post was how you gained insight from both your mothers past birth experiences as well as the movie to come to a conclusion of how you want to have a birth when the time comes.
The only thing i would do is, i would add more try to connect this experience to other peoples experiences taht you looked up. But Besides that this is really good paper and i enjoyed reading this.
Comment from Jessica:
i read your paper, and i thought that it was very good. it talked about how one of your little sisters were born, and the struggles that your mother went through to deliver her. it must have been really hard for her and your dad to be under that kind of pressure. but now she is a healthy girl and that is a blessing. i liked how you connected what we learned in class to a personal experience as well as talk about a side of birth we didnt really cover much on. we didnt really talk much about premature births and the complications it brings. maybe for next time, you could probably add some statistics about premature births around the U.S. and how common or uncommon they are.
Comment from Amanda:
In a subtle way you seem to focus on the differences between how midwives care for their patients and how doctors/hospitals care for their patients. The narrative you wrote about your mother was moving, it showed how birth and how birth is treated affects not only the mother and child but also the family.
i really valued that you wrote your mothers from an active point of view. for instance you added dialogue that i can imagine you would have used while you were at the hospital with your family.
i think this post would have been even more powerful if you had shared your mothers story and then revealed that despite her horrible experience she still wanted to have her next child in a hospital.
i enjoyed reading your post very much- amanda
i really valued that you wrote your mothers from an active point of view. for instance you added dialogue that i can imagine you would have used while you were at the hospital with your family.
i think this post would have been even more powerful if you had shared your mothers story and then revealed that despite her horrible experience she still wanted to have her next child in a hospital.
i enjoyed reading your post very much- amanda
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